1001+flat+tales

**Hi, my name is Tahamina **
Best vacation: Canada ** **Siblings: My little sister Hobbies/Sports: Running and playing with friend **
 * Grade: 7 **
 * Best Holiday: Halloween
 * Birth Month: October **
 * Career Goals: To become famous **
 * Favorite Band(s): Jonas Brothers **
 * Favorite Food: Pizza or Indian foods **
 * <span style="color: rgb(145, 13, 13);">Favorite Munchies: Chocolate & chips **<span style="color: rgb(145, 13, 13);">
 * <span style="color: rgb(145, 13, 13);">Favorite soft drink: Coke or sprite **<span style="color: rgb(145, 13, 13);">
 * <span style="color: rgb(145, 13, 13);">Favorite Subject: P.E. **<span style="color: rgb(145, 13, 13);">
 * <span style="color: rgb(145, 13, 13);">Pet Peeve: Mean people **<span style="color: rgb(145, 13, 13);">
 * <span style="color: rgb(145, 13, 13);">Pets: Cat and dog **<span style="color: rgb(145, 13, 13);">

//<span style="font-size: 28pt; color: rgb(173, 88, 88); font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif;">The Scariest Vacation //

=**<span style="color: rgb(145, 13, 13);">Once there were four friends name Alex, Sonny, Carly, and Michelle. The four friends decided to be together on the summer vacation. Then when school was over a week later the four friends went on vacation together in Tennessee in Alex's house were no body lives. The girls were having fun and also hanging out with Alex's old friend. But one night they went home really late they went inside the house they heard a sound like some one inside around the house! And when they went to sleep they heard a sound that was calling there names. Then they started to scream around the house. In the morning the sound was gone, and they went out of the house because they were so scared! then they went to Alex's friend house and told her about it and the girl started to laugh and they told her to sleep over in the house with them that night. And then at night the girl came to the house and then they had dinner and then did every thing and at 10:00 pm they went to sleep. Suddenly the noise came back again. The girl that didn’t believe the story was screaming. The five girls were trying to be brave but then they said something bad to the thing that was making the sound. Then it made more sound! the whole night the sound was there and they couldn’t sleep. In the morning the sound was still there but was the sound wasn’t as loud and the girls went to at like at 7:00am and woke up at 1:00pm. The noise was there after them and everywhere they go at night the sound was there. Then finely two weeks latter they told the police that there is noise in there house and at night it make lot of sound and two weeks a go they said something bad and the sound was after them and everywhere they go at night the sound is there. And the sound was so creepy its like ghost sound. Then the police said that maybe is something after you girls. Then they went to the doctor did something and the doctor said that there was ghost after them. But the ghost was good and it was trying to tell the something. One week latter the sound was gone they were happy. They went to lots of places and had fun. Then 1 month latter they went home. And they talked about it to their parents and friends, and they said they aren’t going to go there ever again. **= <span style="color: rgb(145, 13, 13);"> =**<span style="font-size: 22pt; color: rgb(135, 18, 18); font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif;"> **<span style="font-size: 22pt; color: rgb(135, 18, 18); font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif;">The End ****=

Questions for Peer Reviewers

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

I<span style="color: rgb(0, 128, 128);"> like the story because it was scary and sent shivers up my spine. It was original because not many others wrote ghost story's.You could improve your grammar. I think that the grammar really interferes with the story. For example, "The girls were having fun and hanging out with Alex old friend. I cant understand if you are saying the girls were having fun hanging out with alex and his old friend or the girls were having fun hanging out with alex, their old friend. <span style="font-size: 90%; color: rgb(255, 146, 0); font-family: Georgia, serif; background-color: rgb(255, 255, 255);"> 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

<span style="color: rgb(0, 128, 128);">the story doesn't build up enough suspense before the final climax.You could have built up more suspense or tension before the climax. The climax is not really satisfying because all the characters do is call the police and they solve the problem

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? <span style="color: rgb(0, 128, 128);"> The characters are not lifelike because the author doesn't describe the characters well They need to describe more of the characters personality's more

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? <span style="color: rgb(0, 128, 128);">Most of the story I cans see because the author tells what happens well but i didn't hear what happened because the author didn't describe it much

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

<span style="color: rgb(0, 128, 128);">Like I said before you can improve on your grammar and describing the events of the story to add suspense but overall it was good <span style="font-size: 90%; color: rgb(255, 255, 0); font-family: Georgia, serif; background-color: rgb(255, 255, 255);"> NICK ISKL!